Torn Asunder

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Torn Asunder's
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4 point(s) for Composition / Songwriting
Cliched instrumentally and lyrically

5 point(s) for Performance
Ok performance, strong sounding voice but not distinctive or original

5 point(s) for Capture
Quite well recorded but not enough punch


14 Total Points
Too cliched. Not very distinctive. Stuck to the rules of the structure of this kind of song. Sounded like they couldn't decide whether they want to be pop or punk.


johnkennedy
Sun Dec 27 07:52:34 2009

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7 point(s) for Composition / Songwriting
Oohhh Guns And Roses anyone!! hehe...great opening start, fun soaring guitar lick..took me be suprise a bit to be honest!

I think the vocal melodies in the verses could be perhaps looked at again, they lack impact in terms of melodic hook, sounds a touch filler-ish, a great song has a verse that is as catchy as the chorus.

Chorus is strong, voices soars but the melody still would benefit from a touch-up here and there. It's very close though!I think reordering the notes ever so slightly would result in the killer hook - which currently it is juuust lacking.

7 point(s) for Performance
Not the most complicated music, but clear that everyone involved can play/sing.

The lead vocal is strong some nice vibrato on some of the notes, however I think the melody doesn't allow the voice to really shine.

6 point(s) for Capture
A very lively recording, doesn't really sound like a studio recording - barr the vocals.

The production makes the track sound about 15 years old. Modern production may help lift the band into the contemporary market.


20 Total Points
Certainly a decent band with talented members.

Again I can't help but feel the sound is a touch dated, I'm confused as to what market exactly you are trying to appeal to, is it the GnR market or the Paramore market? If GnR I think you need to be a little riffier and heavy, if Paramore certianly you would need to move towards a more modern production.


alexbaker
Sun Dec 27 07:52:34 2009

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7 point(s) for Composition / Songwriting
nice solid intro

very standard power rock guitar solo

nice simple melody, that is quite catchy

8 point(s) for Performance
good strong vocals, that carry the song nicely.

couple of niggly bits inbetween sections that could be tighter

7 point(s) for Capture
sounds quite well produced

decent arrangement


22 Total Points
is this pop?

could go bit more poppy kind of You Me At Six style, if you want daytime radio...

or a bit harder if you want rock show plays (sorry to give the radio angle!)

main thing is it's a solid track, but lacks originality.. could be lots of other bands..


alexkenning
Sun Dec 27 07:52:34 2009

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5 point(s) for Composition / Songwriting
Not a bad song - good melodic hook in the chorus.

4 point(s) for Performance
The drummer is rushing like crazy! Strong vocal (be careful of the pitch!), reminds me of Pat Benatar (I'm not sure if that's a good thing or not!)

4 point(s) for Capture
The drums sound weak, the guitars have a nasty, upper-mid buzz - too harsh. I can hardly hear the bass.


13 Total Points
This sounds like a very young and inexperienced band - if they work hard at their writing and improve their general performance, they could do well.


mickglossop
Sun Dec 27 07:52:34 2009

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3 point(s) for Composition / Songwriting
A very average song in my opinion and considering the aim of the band could have been better written for the singer's voice. The chorus is not nearly good enough and the music in the verses is not supporting the vocal at all

2 point(s) for Performance
The vocal performance is quite good and some of the rhythm guitar is quite good but the drumming is dreadful and the timekeeping even worse. This track speeds up and slows down more than rush hour traffic on the M25.

3 point(s) for Capture
Not a good recording either I'm afraid but when the playing is so bad it is difficult to achieve much better.


8 Total Points
I have no problem with the concept of a solid female fronted rock band but this needs to be so much tighter and better to pull that off. Better songs, better playing, better sound - the competition is of much higher quality so you have to raise your game.


tonyplatt
Sun Dec 27 07:52:34 2009

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4 point(s) for Composition / Songwriting
A solid song, but nothing unique about it which would set this band apart. It is certainly memorable in terms of the chorus melody which is positive. There is a fair amount of repetition towards the end.

5 point(s) for Performance
Generally solid. Good performances all around. Shame that the capture and mix detract from this a little. Vocal tuning at times could be perceived as an issue, but it depends on the band's direction.

4 point(s) for Capture
Generally very good, although the drums are over processed and bite and detract from the enjoyment of the track at the start. Vocals lack depth and presence in equal measures. The vocals are captured well.

Good balance between the guitars and bass, although the vocals are too low and the management of their dynamics needs some attention.

Generally over compressed.


13 Total Points


russhepworthsawyer
Sun Dec 27 07:52:34 2009